Friday, March 04, 2011

My mom and I were driving down Capitol Drive and this person was driving down the wrong side of the road and they almost hit us everyone was okay but it was very scary. The most scary part was that they kept going on the road.
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3 comments:

  1. AshmanMarch 4, 2011 at 5:19 AM

    Very short. What happened before the person almost hit you, what was the weather, how close did they get?

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  2. AlyssaMarch 4, 2011 at 5:22 AM

    You have a good beginning, but you could do so much more with it.

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  3. steveasoreMarch 4, 2011 at 5:37 AM

    I agree with Alyssa try to make more out of it. Make this into a descriptive piece or something.

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